Your honor, this innocent man is being accused of a murder he obviously had no motive for. The only one to witness the murder was a maid who clearly had reason to kill Mr. Carew. Mr. Hyde, being given all of Dr. Jekyll's plentyful wealth, would not risk it all to perform a senseless murder. Who are we to rely on one single person's "witnessing" of the murder. We have not made a fair trial yet, and have not even listened to Hyde's alibi. It is utterly ridiculous to accuse Hyde, and have that much faith in, and ignore, the red-herring of the case, simply because Mr. Hyde appears to be more capable of such a violent crime. The maid clearly deserves to be the one being trialed for this cruel murder.
- Pidg
You have certainly peaked my interest with some of your claims here! I am looking forward to your expanded writing that might clarify some of these accusations such as the maid's motive and Hyde's alibi. Remember our observations on the youtube examples. Typically, the the attorney introduces the case in a powerful and captivating manner. Here you kind of jumped right into your reasons for acquitting Hyde which is okay for the blog brainstorm but should be revised in your final writing. Because some of your claims are unclear to people who read the text (Hyde's alibi) you will need to elaborate on these so that the audience can understand better where you are getting this idea from. Also, try to organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs based on your distinct reasons. You could easily separate your ideas into the following paragraphs: motive (Hyde's lack, Maid's motive explained), lack of credible witness (break down what makes her not credible) and Hyde's alibi revealed, and finally the inherent prejudice of the mentally ill in this case (support with facts of society's prejudice). You have some great ideas, I look forward to your elaboration, organization, and insertion of a captivating opening and closing that compels the jury to take your side of this argument. Best of luck
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